I found myself trying to get people into LDing by starting with an explanation like this (usually after the conversation in the group steered towards dreams). But it’s not super helpful if you want to motivate them to give it a try. Maybe starting with an anecdote of your own experience could break the ice better? There are also a couple of TED and TEDx talks on lucid dreaming. Have a look at them and see how they get rolling.
Splash also outlined this already:
Or as Simon Sinek would say: „Start with why“ (and not how or what).
I also remember something Splash once said that stuck with me: „Learning about lucid dreams is like finding out that Magic is real.“ I think you want this level of excitement.
I really like this list. I think that’s exactly what they should pay attention to.
This might be a good place to also instruct them to set an intention for what they want to do in their dream. Or if you want some interaction with them during the talk then this is maybe the first time that they could participate by answering that question (if their ambition isn’t too private).
Scratch this topic or at least rewrite it. Lucid dreaming (and actually dreaming in general) is all about believe. You don’t want to instill in them the believe that what they are going to do could go wrong or only be of sub optimal performance. Have a look at this topic for more text on what I mean. I think the suggestion to touch things and take in all the senses is a good one and can stay. Also what I found useful and reassuring is to remember my waking body lying in my bed or my waking life in general.
When reading the this list I had exactly the same idea as Splash. Give them DILD and WILD as the general categories and give examples for each category. And WBTB is a booster technique to go with either. Maybe you want to describe one technique in more detail and give it as a recommendation for starters. I’d choose MILD.
Again same wave as Splash. Just scratch it. If you come back in a month and some inmates actually had success and give reports of their dreams, then going a bit into the spectrum of awareness is a possible follow up topic.
I also really like this one. I think the grading is very optional, but giving examples is definitely not.
Overall your introduction was well research and touched all key points without being too bogged up in the details! If I ever get into the situation that I want to teach to a group, I may steal get inspired by you work.